One out of every four girls and one out of every six boys will have suffered some form of sexual abuse by their 18th birthday. Around 5,000 children are being sexually abused, in the tri-state area, often by the people they trust the most. Approximately 80% of child abuse is perpetrated by a parent or caregiver. A parent and a caregiver should never do that to their child. They are not really a parent if they do such things because no good parent would want to afflict that pain and trauma in their child's live. A good parent would make sure that this would never happen to their own child. It is sad to think that some kids will never feel safe in their own home.
These abused children range from young infants to teenagers. They reside in every corner of our counties and come from every type of family.
The reason why I decided to start my paper with a fact is because most people have no idea how much child abuse is really taking place around them. Also i thought by starting with a fact that most people do not know, it will intrigue the reader to read on.
The one thing that i wanted to know from the reader is , whether or not it was a good idea to start the paper off with a fact like that? Do u think that was a good way of making the reader want to read on.
5 comments:
It is a good idea to start a paper off with a fact because it makes the reader what to read on. The reader wants to know more detail about your fact.
I think it's a good idea because then the reader knows that this is a serious paper.
I think that the intro is ok, but you can improve it. The intro makes you want to read on but I think you need a better first line to really capture the readers attention.
It is a very good way to start with that fact. It definitely grabs the readers attention. Try to vary some of the ways you ay things, it will make it even more effective.
Ally, I like the use of the facts. They are quite shocking. I don't know if you need to say in your introduction that parents shouldn't do that to children, but rather focus your writing on the problem (like you do in the first part of the intro) and more on the effects of the problem (as you begin to do in the last two sentences.)
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