Ally's Writing The Essay

Final Blog

2008-01-15T05:41:00.000-08:00

I think that the most valuable part of the blogging process is that others can read your blog posting and let you know what they thought about them and what you can do to improve your writing. I think that by seeing what others think about your writing, it can help you to make your writing the best it can be. I think that by using the blog it helped me to manage my time in writing my essays and by having certain things due referring to my topic it kept me on track and able to finish all my essays. The piece of writing that i am most proud of on my blog is my introduction paragraph about child abuse. I think that in the future you can use blogs to help all kids, not only the kids in writing the essay class, to share their college essay so that they can get feedback on it and help them to perfect their essay.

Intro

2008-01-07T05:39:00.000-08:00

One out of every four girls and one out of every six boys will have suffered some form of sexual abuse by their 18th birthday. Around 5,000 children are being sexually abused, in the tri-state area, often by the people they trust the most. Approximately 80% of child abuse is perpetrated by a parent or caregiver. A parent and a caregiver should never do that to their child. They are not really a parent if they do such things because no good parent would want to afflict that pain and trauma in their child's live. A good parent would make sure that this would never happen to their own child. It is sad to think that some kids will never feel safe in their own home.
These abused children range from young infants to teenagers. They reside in every corner of our counties and come from every type of family.

The reason why I decided to start my paper with a fact is because most people have no idea how much child abuse is really taking place around them. Also i thought by starting with a fact that most people do not know, it will intrigue the reader to read on.

The one thing that i wanted to know from the reader is , whether or not it was a good idea to start the paper off with a fact like that? Do u think that was a good way of making the reader want to read on.

The problem/ what we can do to help

2008-01-04T05:39:00.000-08:00

In my final essay for this class i am going to be writing about child abuse. I will focus on what the main problem is and what we can do to help prevent child abuse from increasing in the future. After searching the web and looking at many websites, there was one that stood out the most to me that talked about the problem.

One out of every four girls and one out of every six boys will have suffered some form of sexual abuse by their 18Th birthday. Around 5,000 children are being sexually abused, in the tri-county area, often by the people they trust the most. These abused children range in age from very young infants to the toughest teenagers. They reside in every corner of our counties and come from every socioeconomic strata and type of family.

We need to do what ever it takes so that these facts decrease more and more each year. No child should have to go trough that pain for doing nothing wrong. If you see or know any child that is suffering from some type of abuse, then it is your job to report it right a way. If you don't report something as serious as this, then you are just as much to blame as the person who is abusing the child. You know that something is happening to a child and it is wrong and you don't report it, it is like you think that abusing your child is an ok thing to do. Some people might think that it is not their place to step in and might feel like they are intruding on someones family life that is none of their business, but it might just help safe the life of some child.

Another thing that we can do to help decrease these facts is to talk to our kids at a young age and teach them the proper way of expressing their anger. Also be a role model to your child. You child learns form what he or she see and if he or she sees that you are abusing some one that you love then they will think that it is ok to do that so they will do that to the people they love.

Signs of Child Abuse

2007-12-20T05:32:00.002-08:00

The most common signs of child abuse/neglect are :
*children wearing clothes that are dirty or not suitable for the weather ,
*unwashed appearance( offensive body odor )
*indicators of hunger for example asking for or stealing food, going through trash for food, eating too fast or too much when food is provided for a group,
*apparent lack of supervision (wandering alone, home alone, left in a car), *colds fevers, infected cuts,
*frequent absence or lateness to school, disruptive behavior in class
*babies- the failure to relate to other people or to the surroundings.

If you know any kid with any of these signs of child abuse or neglect then you should report it right away. It is your job to help save these kids because if you don't take any action then they kids will become even more abused and/ or neglected. We must do everything that we can to help kids that are being abused and/or neglected. Even if you feel like it is not your place to step in and help because you feel like that you are intruding on someones personal life, do it any way to help these innocent kids be able to be kids again.

Child abuse and neglect are both the same thing. You are not treating your kids the ways that they should be treated and it effects them both physicaly and mentally. No child should have to go through life living under these conditions. They should be able to live life to the fullest and just have fun and be a kids.

The horrible facts about child abuse

2007-12-19T05:28:00.000-08:00

After looking through many websites on the Internet I came across a very good source that had a lot of information about the shocking statistics of child abuse. By finding all of this information , I think that it will help me a lot in writing my paper because it is a great way to let people how much child abuse is really taking place in the world that they live in. One would never know that so much child abuse is taking place.

One of the most shocking statistics that I found out was that approximately 80% of child abuse is perpetrated by a parent or caregiver. A parent and a caregiver should never do that to their child. They are not really a parent if they do such things because no good parent would want to afflict that pain and trauma in their child's live. A good parent would make sure that this would never happen to their own child. It is sad to think that some kids will never feel safe in their own home.

Another awfull fact that I found out about child abuse is that childern under the age of 4 account for 75% of all child abuse deaths. Kids 4 and under are just starting their lives out and having fun, why would anyone want to harm they child and not alllow them to live a normal life as a kid. It is upseting to think that kids so young have to go through this pain and are not able to live a normal life as a child and just have fun.

All these statistics are very shocking and are something that need to be decreased. If you see any sign of abuse you should report it right a way so that the child does not have to go through another day of pain. People need to do whatever they can so we can reduce these statistics.

What you can do

2007-12-18T05:36:00.000-08:00

After searching the Internet about information on child abuse, i decided that one aspect that i am going to talk about in my paper is what you can do as a parent or aunt or even a brother to teach younger child that child abuse is never the answer. You should teach your kids early, listen to them if they ask you questions, tell them other ways to express their anger, talk about it with them and be a role model. By doing this things, this with hopefully teach your kids that child abuse is a very bad thing and is something that they should never do or have to go through.

Child Abuse

2007-12-11T06:36:00.000-08:00

For my final essay in this class i am going to be writing about child abuse. The reason why i decided that i was going to write about child abuse is because it is something that needs to be stopped and talked about so people really know what is going on. Also you child could be getting abused right in front of you and you might have no clue that it is happening so by writing an essay it might help people to better understand what child abuse really means. In researching this topic i found out that at least two out of every ten girls and one out of every ten boys are sexually abused by the end of their 13th year. Steps need to be taken to stop this from happening. I belive that more people need to step in when they see the first sign of child abuse. It is something that can be stopped but a lot of people are too afraid to say something because they feel like it is not their bussiness. But if something really bad does happen then how would they feel? By stepping in you could save a life.

Volleyball vs. Basketball

2007-12-02T13:19:00.000-08:00

In the next essay that i am going to be writing Iwill be comparing volleyball and basketball. I will write about the things that they have in common with each other as well as how they differ from each other.I think that writing a comparison essay is a great way of showing how two things that people think are so alike can also be differnt in many ways as well. It can also help a the reader in deciding whether or not they want to play the sport. It will help them understand the game more and will help them in their decision making.
The method of writing that i am going to be using will be the flip flop method. I will be easy to go back and forth from basketball to volleyball and it will not confuse the writer.

Comparison Blog

2007-11-29T05:32:00.000-08:00

Before reading, Brothers, Bad Blood and the Blackwater Tangle and Battle of the Beds: Suave S.U.V.'s With Pickup Lines, I learned in class about the block method of writing and the flip flop method of writing. In using the block method you first present all the information on the first topic and then present all the information on the second topic. And in the flip flop method you compare and contrast two topics back in forth.
The two articles were written in two different styles of writing. In the , "Battle of the Beds: Suave S.U.V.'s With Pickup Lines," two things, the Ford Explorer Sport Trac and the Chevrolet Avalanche , were being compared. Over all, the Sport Trac which was designed by a, Chelsia Lau, has a real macho look. "I wanted to pull up to a stoplight in a cloud of dust and yell, “Whoa!!!” But also the Chevrolet Avalanche is no longer the Ugly Betty of the bunch.
In the " Brothers, Bad Blood and Blackwater Tangle," article nothing was being compared until almost the end of the article. In the beginning of the essay it talks about each brothers accomplishments and all they have achieved over the years. It then later goes on to explain how each brother had different parts in the scandal and how they both were accused of different things that went on in the scandal.
By reading both these articles it helped me to get a better understanding on what to do and what not to do in writing a comparison essay.

Cell Phone Blockers!

2007-11-13T05:34:00.000-08:00

A new technology has come to the United States, it is called cell phone blockers. This is used to cut off people mid conversaton while taking on their cell phone. I think that it is both a good thing and a bad thing. There is a time and place for that to take place . If someone is having an emergemcy and you need to get to a certain place and you get cut off mid way in the converstaion while the person is telling you where they are located then that could cause a very serious result. But it is a good thing on the other hand becasue if you are out to dinner you dont want to hear people talking on the phone about the latest news in their life. It is very rude and annoying. You are out trying to enjoy a peacful dinner and you dont wanna hear about other peoples life. After looking at many differtn websiting the one that caught my eye the most was http://www.nytimes.com/2007/11/04/technology/04jammer.html?_r=3&pagewanted=1&oref=slogin
You should check it out because it is very informtive.

Expressing Yourself!!!!

2007-11-02T05:30:00.000-07:00

Blogs are a very personal thing. It is something that you create yourself to communcate with others and show them your own personal style. You can pick what ever background and font you want so that you can put your own personal touch on it. By looking and reading other peoples blogs, it helps you to see what other people are thinking or what they are going though and it can sometimes help you if you are thinking or going though the same thing as that person. It is also very interestring to see how others make there blog and what they write about. It can also help you to get examples from others on what or what not to do in writting certain types of essays. After looking at several different blogs it showed me that theere are many differnt ways to you can express yourself using a blog. For example some teenagers use blogs to post pictures so that they can share them with their friends and comment on each others as a way of fun.

College Eassy Intro

2007-10-29T04:04:00.000-07:00

I am always asked the same questions after telling someone that I am a twin. The first question I always get is: Are you guys telepathic? While, I have always wished I could answer yes, the truth is I can’t. I will admit that I have been tempted to pretend, but, honestly there are no magic powers or unexplained physics between me and my twin brother, Andrew. Unfortunately, we can not read each others minds or feel what the other one is feeling. We do not know when the other is in pain or in trouble or excited when we are apart. I think that would be so cool though. The next question is usually: Are you & your brother identical twins? Boy/girl twins can never be identical, no matter how much they look alike. If anyone really thought about, they would realize that it is impossible for boy/girl twins to be identical, given that fact that one of us is a boy and the other is a girl. Boy/Girl twins are always called fraternal twins. Lastly and definitely my favorite question is: What is it like being a twin? My response to that one is always the same: It is great, but it hasn’t always been easy!

College essay

2007-10-22T05:41:00.000-07:00

I think one of the main reasons why it is so challenging to write a college essay is because for the most part you have to write about something personal and that is hard to do for some people. Some people do not like to tell others about their life because it is very private and they feel that it is nobody's business but their own. As for me, I like writing about my life and the people in my life. It is a way for me to express myself and tell people about all the good things that have been in my life. It is hard for me to tell people about my life by speaking to them, so writing about it for me is much easier.I am going to use my " It's a twin thing" essay for most of my college essays.

2007-10-19T05:45:00.000-07:00

This is my first blog for Mr.Miller's writing the essay class. This is a fun way to express yourself!